| Haiku - Departure sorrow 11:00 - Jun 28 with 2080 views | Keno |
How about adding some culture to board?
Ive been trying too educate myself and looking reading up on Haiku. I tend to favour the more traditional 5-7-5 17 syllable approach and felt inspired to add
Departure sorrow
When he goes there will not be
FOPRP
anyone care to add anymore? [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:01]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 with 1641 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point. |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 with 1617 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes. | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:25 - Jun 28 with 1605 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point. |
With season ended
Disappointment will not fade
Dyer change needed [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:33]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:31 - Jun 28 with 1596 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes. |
Blue Badger patient
Am worried by his coldness
hope he warmer now [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:32]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:32 - Jun 28 with 1592 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:25 - Jun 28 by Keno |
With season ended
Disappointment will not fade
Dyer change needed [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:33]
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You need another syllable in last line. Perhaps insert the word 'not' after 'should'?
Edit:
I see that you were
There before me. It seems I
almost got it right! [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:36]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:33 - Jun 28 with 1586 views | BanksterDebtSlave |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes. |
I would have to say
Should have gone to Specsavers
Is the key refrain. |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 with 1585 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:32 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
You need another syllable in last line. Perhaps insert the word 'not' after 'should'?
Edit:
I see that you were
There before me. It seems I
almost got it right! [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:36]
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actually had one too many do should now be 5
this counting malarkey is hard work | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:37 - Jun 28 with 1573 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 by Keno |
actually had one too many do should now be 5
this counting malarkey is hard work |
Oh yeah!
Fun, though... | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:40 - Jun 28 with 1561 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:37 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
Oh yeah!
Fun, though... |
Culture is needed
TWTD can be drear
Sunday cheer now here | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 with 1517 views | WeWereZombies |
Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...
Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)
Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:35 - Jun 28 with 1487 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 by WeWereZombies |
Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...
Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)
Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere |
Obviously I would have written them in Japanese but I was sure how to find the 'funny letters' they use on the keypad
the only comparative English verse would be either in limerick
his appointment made some of us cough
at his results many more they did scoff
on this bright Sunday
ive just one thing to say
Paul Lambert now please f4ck off
Or four line rhyming couplet in iambic parameter
his light doth shine oh so dim
as performances do so appal
oh its time to simply say
F4ck right off PR Paul | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 with 1484 views | factual_blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 by WeWereZombies |
Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...
Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)
Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere |
battenberg is cr@p
battenberg is really sh!t
I hate battenberg |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 with 1484 views | Keno |
Battenberg cake sweet
a true mutli colour treat
yet some not liked [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 12:39]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:49 - Jun 28 with 1473 views | WeWereZombies |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:35 - Jun 28 by Keno |
Obviously I would have written them in Japanese but I was sure how to find the 'funny letters' they use on the keypad
the only comparative English verse would be either in limerick
his appointment made some of us cough
at his results many more they did scoff
on this bright Sunday
ive just one thing to say
Paul Lambert now please f4ck off
Or four line rhyming couplet in iambic parameter
his light doth shine oh so dim
as performances do so appal
oh its time to simply say
F4ck right off PR Paul |
There was a young poster named Facters
In Ixworth, fields ploughed by tractors
When asked about cake
He made a mistake
And was served Battenberg with cream high in lactose | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 13:19 - Jun 28 with 1440 views | Ryorry |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 by Keno |
actually had one too many do should now be 5
this counting malarkey is hard work |
"this counting malarkey is hard work"
Said the Chancellor
Of the Exchequer Rishi
Bowing to boris. |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:28 - Jun 28 with 1397 views | factual_blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 by Keno |
Battenberg cake sweet
a true mutli colour treat
yet some not liked [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 12:39]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:41 - Jun 28 with 1383 views | catch74 |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point. |
That’s beautiful and poignant, a masterpiece. |  |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:31 - Jun 28 with 1357 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:41 - Jun 28 by catch74 |
That’s beautiful and poignant, a masterpiece. |
Thank you.
Ramsey and Robson
Went on to manage England.
We were the poorer. | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 with 1350 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:31 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
Thank you.
Ramsey and Robson
Went on to manage England.
We were the poorer. |
Your good at this!!
tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 15:38]
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:43 - Jun 28 with 1333 views | BanksterDebtSlave |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 by Keno |
Your good at this!!
tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 15:38]
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Under his bushell hides
A talent to entertain
Hidden gem revealed | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 19:38 - Jun 28 with 1276 views | Tangledupin_Blue |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 by Keno |
Your good at this!!
tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you [Post edited 28 Jun 2020 15:38]
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Thanks for those kind words, Keno.
What is it that makes
Norwich's roll of honour?
Participation. | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 20:12 - Jun 28 with 1257 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 19:38 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue |
Thanks for those kind words, Keno.
What is it that makes
Norwich's roll of honour?
Participation. |
We should say a thanks
To Phil and Gav, without you
What would we lot do. | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 09:45 - Jun 29 with 1207 views | Keno |
| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 20:12 - Jun 28 by Keno |
We should say a thanks
To Phil and Gav, without you
What would we lot do. |
the week starts Monday
not much joy ahead, just work
at least I have TWTD too fill the void, bring me some amusement some light from the humdruminess of the week | |
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| Haiku - Departure sorrow on 10:49 - Jun 29 with 1191 views | Swansea_Blue |
This is my favourite haiku
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