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Haiku - Departure sorrow 11:00 - Jun 28 with 2085 viewsKeno

How about adding some culture to board?

Ive been trying too educate myself and looking reading up on Haiku. I tend to favour the more traditional 5-7-5 17 syllable approach and felt inspired to add

Departure sorrow
When he goes there will not be
FOPRP

anyone care to add anymore?
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:01]

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:12 - Jun 28 with 1651 viewsBanksterDebtSlave

In the spirit of education.....'to' ....

Sorry to tell you
Too really just will not do
PRP must pay
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:15]

"They break our legs and tell us to be grateful when they offer us crutches."
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 with 1645 viewsTangledupin_Blue

The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 with 1621 viewsTangledupin_Blue

Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:25 - Jun 28 with 1609 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point.


With season ended
Disappointment will not fade
Dyer change needed
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:33]

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:31 - Jun 28 with 1600 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes.


Blue Badger patient
Am worried by his coldness
hope he warmer now
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:32 - Jun 28 with 1596 viewsTangledupin_Blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:25 - Jun 28 by Keno

With season ended
Disappointment will not fade
Dyer change needed
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:33]


You need another syllable in last line. Perhaps insert the word 'not' after 'should'?

Edit:
I see that you were
There before me. It seems I
almost got it right!
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:36]

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:33 - Jun 28 with 1590 viewsBanksterDebtSlave

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:21 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

Bournemouth beach crowded
With people from all over,
Come to test their eyes.


I would have to say
Should have gone to Specsavers
Is the key refrain.

"They break our legs and tell us to be grateful when they offer us crutches."
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 with 1589 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:32 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

You need another syllable in last line. Perhaps insert the word 'not' after 'should'?

Edit:
I see that you were
There before me. It seems I
almost got it right!
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 11:36]


actually had one too many do should now be 5

this counting malarkey is hard work

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:37 - Jun 28 with 1577 viewsTangledupin_Blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 by Keno

actually had one too many do should now be 5

this counting malarkey is hard work


Oh yeah!


Fun, though...

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:40 - Jun 28 with 1565 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:37 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

Oh yeah!


Fun, though...


Culture is needed
TWTD can be drear
Sunday cheer now here

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 with 1521 viewsWeWereZombies

Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...

Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)

Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:35 - Jun 28 with 1491 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 by WeWereZombies

Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...

Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)

Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere


Obviously I would have written them in Japanese but I was sure how to find the 'funny letters' they use on the keypad

the only comparative English verse would be either in limerick

his appointment made some of us cough
at his results many more they did scoff
on this bright Sunday
ive just one thing to say
Paul Lambert now please f4ck off

Or four line rhyming couplet in iambic parameter

his light doth shine oh so dim
as performances do so appal
oh its time to simply say
F4ck right off PR Paul

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 with 1488 viewsfactual_blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:22 - Jun 28 by WeWereZombies

Sorry to be a knob about this, but the more traditional approach would be to write it in Japanese...

Anyway, and hardly knowing any Japanese, I'm going to reply in English but I will uphold tradition as far as eschewing (bless you) imagism and having kijo (object) as well as hireji (indicator of change)

Empty Portman Road
Catering has no drinks, snacks
Battenberg elsewhere


battenberg is cr@p
battenberg is really sh!t
I hate battenberg

Ta neige, Acadie, fait des larmes au soleil
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 with 1488 viewsKeno

Battenberg cake sweet
a true mutli colour treat
yet some not liked
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 12:39]

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:49 - Jun 28 with 1477 viewsWeWereZombies

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:35 - Jun 28 by Keno

Obviously I would have written them in Japanese but I was sure how to find the 'funny letters' they use on the keypad

the only comparative English verse would be either in limerick

his appointment made some of us cough
at his results many more they did scoff
on this bright Sunday
ive just one thing to say
Paul Lambert now please f4ck off

Or four line rhyming couplet in iambic parameter

his light doth shine oh so dim
as performances do so appal
oh its time to simply say
F4ck right off PR Paul


There was a young poster named Facters
In Ixworth, fields ploughed by tractors
When asked about cake
He made a mistake
And was served Battenberg with cream high in lactose

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 13:19 - Jun 28 with 1444 viewsRyorry

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:34 - Jun 28 by Keno

actually had one too many do should now be 5

this counting malarkey is hard work


"this counting malarkey is hard work"

Said the Chancellor
Of the Exchequer Rishi
Bowing to boris.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:28 - Jun 28 with 1401 viewsfactual_blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 12:37 - Jun 28 by Keno

Battenberg cake sweet
a true mutli colour treat
yet some not liked
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 12:39]


Haiku - Departure sorrow by factual_blue 28 Jun 2020 12:37
battenberg is cr@p
battenberg is really sh!t
I hate battenberg


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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:41 - Jun 28 with 1387 viewscatch74

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 11:14 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

The ones who told us
"Be careful what you wish for"
Might have had a point.


That’s beautiful and poignant, a masterpiece.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:31 - Jun 28 with 1361 viewsTangledupin_Blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 14:41 - Jun 28 by catch74

That’s beautiful and poignant, a masterpiece.


Thank you.



Ramsey and Robson
Went on to manage England.
We were the poorer.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 with 1354 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:31 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

Thank you.



Ramsey and Robson
Went on to manage England.
We were the poorer.


Your good at this!!

tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:43 - Jun 28 with 1337 viewsBanksterDebtSlave

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 by Keno

Your good at this!!

tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 15:38]


Under his bushell hides
A talent to entertain
Hidden gem revealed

"They break our legs and tell us to be grateful when they offer us crutches."
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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 19:38 - Jun 28 with 1280 viewsTangledupin_Blue

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 15:36 - Jun 28 by Keno

Your good at this!!

tangledupin blue
Haiku he surely can do
We all salute you
[Post edited 28 Jun 2020 15:38]


Thanks for those kind words, Keno.


What is it that makes
Norwich's roll of honour?
Participation.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 20:12 - Jun 28 with 1261 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 19:38 - Jun 28 by Tangledupin_Blue

Thanks for those kind words, Keno.


What is it that makes
Norwich's roll of honour?
Participation.


We should say a thanks
To Phil and Gav, without you
What would we lot do.

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 09:45 - Jun 29 with 1211 viewsKeno

Haiku - Departure sorrow on 20:12 - Jun 28 by Keno

We should say a thanks
To Phil and Gav, without you
What would we lot do.


the week starts Monday
not much joy ahead, just work
at least I have TWTD too fill the void, bring me some amusement some light from the humdruminess of the week

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Haiku - Departure sorrow on 10:49 - Jun 29 with 1195 viewsSwansea_Blue

This is my favourite haiku


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